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#1 Daisho

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Posted 12 August 2015 - 06:00 PM

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Name: Benryu Hitsugawa
 
Alias: Beni

Age: 19

Gender: Male

Height: 6'2"

Weight: 200lbs
 
Element: Fuuton/Hyouton
 
Language: Common, Nagarian, Hyougaan.
 
Appearance: At first glance, Benryu can look a bit menacing and intimidating. He often appears cold or even hostile, his facial features taking nothing away, only adding to this aura he gives off. He is above average in height, often taller than others his age, and is powerfully built with strong lean well trained and forged muscles designed for speed and strength. Benryu has relatively long arms and legs, but appear shorter than the are from the bulk of his muscle. Long stringy black hair runs down over his shoulders and back which give way to rounded pinned back ears, a small sharp down turned nose and a sharp grin. Benryu has dark red eyes, with dark lashes which sort of outline each day making each expression a little deeper and vivid. His dark eyebrows start off a little wider at the beginning but quickly taper off over his eyes, adding even more to his natural grimace.
 
 
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Class: Shinobi
 
Rank: Chuunin

Village: Yamagakure

 

Statistics
 
Level: 10 [0/100]

Ninjutsu D C B
Genjutsu D
Taijutsu D C B
Seals D C
Strength D C
Speed D C B
Intelligence D C
Endurance D
Stamina D C
 
D Rank Missions: 10
C Rank Missions: 5
B Rank Missions: 0
A Rank Missions: 0
S Rank Missions: 0

D Rank Crimes: 0
C Rank Crimes: 0
B Rank Crimes: 0
A Rank Crimes: 0
S Rank Crimes: 0
 

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Previous RPC Profile: http://www.theninja-...eishu +ryūketsu


Edited by Daisho, 25 August 2015 - 07:47 PM.



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Posted 12 August 2015 - 06:01 PM

Inventory


 
- Kunai knives[4] Attached to Ben's basic utility belt.
- Fuuma Shuriken[3] 2 Attached to Ben's basic utility belt.

- Shuriken[5] Attached to Ben's basic utility belt.
- E-Tag[10]  4 attached to Kunai. Other six wrapped up neatly in a pouch on Ben's basic utility belt.
- Flash Bom[4] Tucked away in another pouch on Ben's basic utility belt.
- Blood pill[4] Tucked away into a small pouch on Ben's basic utility belt.
- Soldier pill[4] Tucked away into a small pouch on Ben's basic utility belt.
 


Edited by Daisho, 21 August 2015 - 08:36 PM.

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Posted 12 August 2015 - 06:01 PM

Jutsu and Abilities


 
 
NINJUTSU
 D rank [7/30]
- [Fuuton]: Stop
- [Hyouton]: Daeki Senbon [Ice Release: Saliva Senbon]
- [Hyouton]: Hyoushou no Sousaku [Ice Release: Ice Floor Creation]

- Bunshin no Jutsu [Clone Technique]

- Henge no Jutsu [Transformation Technique]

- Kawarimi no Jutsu [Body Switch Technique]

- Nawanuke no Jutsu [Rope Untying Skill]

 

C rank [7/20]

- Kinobori [Tree Climbing]

- Suimen Hokou no Gyou [Art of Water Walking]

- Jibaku Fuda: Kassei [Exploding Tag: Activate]

- Kyougiri [Vibrating Cutter]

- Ashikubi no Pusshu [Ankle Push]

- [Hyouton]: Koori Okingu [Ice Walking]

- [Fuuinjutsu]: Chouin [Sealing]

 

B rank [2/10]

- [Fuuton]: Kyoufuu no Chisou [Wind Release: Wind Layer]

- [Hyouton]: Hyouheki [Ice Release: Ice Wall]

 

GENJUTSU

 

 

TAIJUTSU
 D/E Rank [3/30]
- Karakuri Ken Tentou [Evade and Counter]
- Shuriken no Bu-meran Nagewaza [Shuriken Boomerang Toss]
- Yaen Hanewaza [Monkey Flip]

 

C rank [3/20]

- Oshiromai no Taki [Backwards Waterfall]

- Shoushitsu [Knee Strike]

- Tokken [Tackle Charge]

 

B rank [4/10]

- Side step

- Reverse Spinning Axle

- Tatsumaki Dageki

- Yanagi no Mai [Dance of the Willow]


Edited by Daisho, 25 August 2015 - 07:43 PM.

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Posted 25 August 2015 - 03:33 AM

This profile is ready to be looked over and critiqued.


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Posted 25 August 2015 - 03:35 AM

Quickly:

 

  1. You might want to keep active track of your jutsu slots (such as putting 10/10 or 10/20 next to the ranks)
  2. You only have D-Ranked Genjutsu.  So you can't have Kai, which is C-Rank.

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Posted 25 August 2015 - 03:48 AM

Kai has been removed and I have a way to keep track of my jutsu now. Thank you : ).


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Posted 25 August 2015 - 01:32 PM

Empty sections like Clan, Org and Bloodline can be removed.

With B Rank Nin you can have another element if you want.

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Posted 25 August 2015 - 06:06 PM

Nitpick time~

 

  • Put a space between Alias: and Beni
  • Don't forget the inches mark ["] after the 2. All you have is 6'2.
  • If you are a shinobi from a Hidden Village, then you must put the Hidden Village as your village, rather than the village of birth. Weird, I know, but I got told the same thing. If you are a Bandless Ninja, however, then you can keep it as is.
  • Place a colon [:] after Clan. You seemed to have forgotten that part. If you are not going to be in a clan or organization, you can also opt to just remove those sections entirely.
  • With B ranked Strength stat, you can have up to 30 items in your inventory. Just letting you know if you didn't.
  • You can also take out the C rank listed in Genjutsu, seeing how there is nothing there anymore.

Nice job, keep it up, and welcome back :P


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Posted 25 August 2015 - 07:50 PM

@RyouKachi

 

I have removed the needless parts of the app, thank you. As for the other element, I've got my hands full with these two as it is for now, I might take another at a later date XD.

 

@ZacDesu

 

Everything has been fixed! The reason why I am currently withholding much of my inventory of items is that I am waiting to put a point into sealing so I can make custom sealing items and organize it better as I have plans for some weapons in the future. Thank you for the welcome back though! Looking forward to having some fun.


Edited by Daisho, 25 August 2015 - 08:05 PM.

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Posted 25 August 2015 - 08:14 PM

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