[Sato] Tsubasa, Ayume

[ayu13]

Name: Tsubasa, Ayume

Age: 12

Gender: Female

Height: 4’8

Weight: 101 lbs

Appearance:

Ayume has long ebony-hair that goes way up to her mid-back with two bangs framing her face. She ties it in a lose ponytail to keep it clean and neat. Her pale-pink skin and heart-shaped face was matched by crimson eyes. She wears a black turtle-neck paired with cream shorts and black sandals. Her accessories include a pendant that is formed in a crescent moon that her grandmother left her and a pair of black gloves (only use during spars or fights).

Rank: Academy Student

Village: Sato

Language: Sati, Common

Main/Favored Weapon: Wires that measures 8 and a half feet.

Side Arms: 5 shurikens, 3 exploding tags, 2 kunai, and 2 soldier pills.

Element: Katon

Fighting Type: Ninjutsu, Taijutsu

Fighting Styles: Uses ninjutsu more than Taijutsu.
Strategic. She carefully plans her attacks first before striking.

Physical Strengths:
-Quick reflexes
-Good chakra control
-Keen eyesight
-Hugh Stamina

Mental Strengths:
-Cautious of her surrounding
-Accurate strategies
-Patient
-Has self-control

Physical Weaknesses:
-Low resistance to cold
-Low endurance
-Allergic to animals (anything that has furs)
She sneezes when a furry animal is near and doesn't stop sneezing until the animal is gone.
-Low strength

Mental weaknesses:
-Talking about parents
-Unable to express her self towards others.
-Too afraid of what might other's say about her.
-Afraid of being alone.

Jutsus:
-Bunshin no Jutsu
-Henge no Jutsu
-Kawarimi no Jutsu
-Wire Manipulation no Jutsu
-Chakra Kami Nawa

Backround:
Ayume lives with her grandparents since she was a baby without knowing her parents. She was always contented with her grandparents and not a word came out of her lips about her parents, where they are or who they are. They call her, 'Ayu'. No one knew about her other name, 'cause it was their little secret. Whenever kids nearby would ask her to play she would ask first permission and they would let her play. But ever since her grandmother died, she stopped playing and started to be afraid of being alone. She was too cautious of her grandfather doing things that she didn't noticed that she was being overprotective. She doesn't talk to her classmates not even the teachers. The only time she talks is when the teacher asks her a question or when she recites. Although, she's very smart, the fact that she seldom talks, makes her one of the most intelligent student in the class.
The only time she talks is when that person is close to her. Or she gets quiet when she likes that person. She's the shy-type kind of person. Not anti-social. But she's very friendly once you get to be her friend. She likes people introducing themselves rather than introducing herself.
She also met a kid when she was little. She doesn't completely remember him. Not his features nor his first name. Thw only thing she remembers about him is his last name. Tsubasa. They accidentally bumped each other. Ayu dropped her pendant and that boy found it. He kept it for a while, and when they bumped each other again, he gave it to her. Ever since that day, they became good friends until his family moved to the other side of the village. She never saw him again.

Sample Post:

The class was over and Ayume was getting ready to go home. She was packing her things and fixing herself. As soon as she was about to leave, a group of girls came towards her.
"Hey Ayume, wanna go and play with us?" one of the girls asked.
"Ummm... I, uhh..." At times like these, she would either run or make an excuse. "I'm sorry." she bowed politely and dashed off. The group of girls were baffled and thought that she's weird.

Ayume was leaning on a post while panting hard. She didn't know ehy she ran, she just did. She sat near a bench and pulled out a pendant on her shirt. She examined it. It's crescent shape reminds her the moon, reminds her of her grandmother. She didn't know what happened. How she died. She just saw her grandfather crying near the dead body. She never even ask how she died. Instead, she just kept quiet, and sat one of the corners of the room. Just like a few days before her grandmother died. When her grandfather asked her to sit beside him. He asked why she hadn't ask them about her parents. She just shrugged them off and went to her room. Ayume closed her eyes, took a deep breath and stood up, eyes open now. It's time for her to go home. She walked steadily and saw her home. She opened the door (traditional doors that slides open like in Japan) and uttered, "I'm home!"

[demideviluk]

3 soldier pills and 2 food pills

What are you using as a difference?
Since soldier pill = food pill in basic terminology.
And we either need to bump it down to 2…or put 2 of each and explain what each do.

Backround:

The background is made of pure awesomeness…
However there are a few things I should mention:
1)RPing a character who never talks is difficult <.<
2)You need two paragraphs of background…could just add in some childhood events for detail.

-Accurate strategies
-Not open to any other possibility of strategies.

Confusion on why these don’t contradict lol

-Vitality

You basically mean this as ‘low endurance’ right?

-Clumsy (easily trips)

Anki HATEZ this since it’s a convenient weakness.
You should replace please.

-Allergic to animals

All animals?
Just for referance, how allergic?

-Below average strength

Nothing wrong, but remember balancing. This is below average, but you don’t have an ‘above average’ strength.

Other than those things, this is a good profile.
See there was nothing to be scared about lol

[Marikit]

mental strength: cautious of surroundings

seems contradictory with

physical strength: clumsy (trips easily)

If you have been mentally aware how come you still tripped? XD
Unless that's basicallly what you mean by your weakness ~ that you have already perceived first hand the imminent danger of tripping yet you tripped anyways.

Plus she has accurate strategies but refuses to hear out other strategies? Then how can she be sure that her's is accurate. XD

Talking about parents all the time? with whom? with others? then she's able to express herself to others. XD

More background story, I'd like to know about Tsubasa.

Good try Ayu!

[ayu13]

Done and done!

Not sure if that suits you guys?

Should I edit it more?

[demideviluk]

-Average strength

What the frell? XD
You just made this stronger than it was before, I was implying that you either make the weakness weaker or make a strength weaker…maybe I don’t imply hard enough sometimes lol
Average =/= weakness

She doesn't talk to her classmates not even the teachers. The only time she talks is when the teacher asks her a question or when she recites. Although, she's very smart, the fact that she seldom talks, makes her one of the most intelligent student in the class.
The only time she talks is when that person is close to her. Or she gets quiet when she likes that person. She's the shy-type kind of person. Not anti-social. But she's very friendly once you get to be her friend. She likes people introducing themselves rather than introducing herself.

All of this is personality…I want to see more background ^^

S/Ws:

They are fine…but slightly unbalanced, which means we need to rejig some wording.
Your have 3 good strengths and 1 great strength (lots of stamina)
But you only have 2 good strengths, an allergy (I’m passing that as a good as well) and a *cough*not weakness*cough*.
You can see the problem, you have a great strength but no great weakness.

[ayu13]

Okay. It's done. If there's still any wrong in here.

Help me out...

[demideviluk]

-Bad at genjutsu

Genjutsu is nearly always a mental thing and is so in this case.

Only issue now is the 'great' weakness, you have two options.
1) Reduce the power of your stamina from 'great' to 'good' and come up with a normal weakness
2) Come up with a 'great' weakness

[ayu13]

How about that?

[demideviluk]

Stamped

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