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Hatuke
11-10-2007, 21:07
Name:Hatuke Gokuin
Age:10

Gender:Male

Height:135 centimeters

Weight:32 Kilograms

Appearance: Hatuke has cat-like violet eyes and his hair is dark blue, managing to almost reach his shoulders. He mostly leaves the hair as it is, but on rare occasions makes a ponytail. He wears as a top a Mesh with small holes and over it a silver Happi, untied, covering only his arms and the sides of his chest leaving the middle part visible. The lower part of his body clothing is composed of a undivided, blood like red Hakama, his footwear of light blue shoes, commonly used and some white socks. On his face he also has a small X-like scar over his nose. Using his Hakama, he carries two holsters, one specially designed. One of it is on the left of the Hakama while the other ones on the right, a bit of them covered by the Happi.The left one is specially designed to carry his small silver flute, with the picture a red dragon draw across it and the other one is for his Bokken. His hands are also covered with silver obis,each about 13 feet long.
Level/Rank:Academy students

Village: Rikuhi

Language:Rihukuu and Common

Main/Favored Weapon: In combat, he uses a Bokken, 1 and a half foot in length and does not weight more then 20 lbs.

Side Arms:Flute & Kunai.

Element:Fire

Fighting Type:Main:Ninjutsu/Secondary:Taijutsu

Fighting Style: Hatuke is more of a combination of Passive and Aggresive. If at first he cannot convince his opponent to do this the easy way he will use force but only minimal, to make him surrender.

Physical Strengths:
-Speed(Very High)
-Stamina(Above Average)
-Reflexes(Above Average)
-Eyesight(Above Average)
Mental Strengths:
-Negotiations(Very High)-Hatuke knows how to negotiate in alot of situations. Although he cannot barter for a better price he knows how to get the best out of a deal or convince his enemies to give up.
-Hard to intimidate
-Can keep his temper under control
-Knowledge of other countries

Physical Weaknesses:
-Very low Strenght
-Loses more blood then ussual
-Fragile body
-Weak Immune system


Mental Weaknesses:
-Phobia of Height
-Phobia of Water
-Knows little of his own country and surroundings of it.
-Intimidating skills(Very Weak)

Jutsus:
Bunshin no Jutsu [Clone Technique]
Rank: E (Basic)
Requirements: None
Description: This technique must be mastered by any ninja who has graduated from the shinobi academy. It's the most basic technique a Gennin must know, since it can be a real lifesaver. This ninjutsu creates a simple illusion clone identical to the caster. The clone however has no physical properties and will disperse the moment it is touched.

Chakra Kami Nawa [Chakra Hair Rope]
Rank: D
Requirements: A Lot Of Hair
Description: A Ninjutsu technique requiring quite a lot of hair to be scattered around the opponent's feet, under the guise of the ninja snapping mentally. Showing no apparent danger, the opponent should not suspect the hair as a weapon. But placing their hands on the path of hair in front of them, the ninja using this technique can make a powerful rope of hair by channeling their chakra through it, limiting the opponent's movement to simply pivoting in place. This sets them up for a more devastating attack, like the Shintenshin no Jutsu [Art of the Valentine].

Henge no Jutsu [Transformation Technique]
Rank: E (Basic)
Requirements: None
Description: Henge is the basic skill a ninja must know to become a Genin. It's mostly used as a decoy, to confuse the opponent by transforming into somebody that's an ally with the enemy, and then attack from the back when he's not expecting it. This technique can easily be combined with other jutsus for a more powerful effect, such as with Kage Bunshin no Jutsu [Shadow Clone Technique].

Kawarimi no Jutsu
Rank: E (Basic)
Requirements: None
Description: Kawarimi is a widely used and very famous skill among shinobi. The user taps into their chakra and exchanges places with an object of similiar weight and/or size. This is clearly an evasion technique used to dodge attacks; however it can be linked with other jutsus or attacks to create massive damage if done properly.

Uta no Aki
Rank: D
Requirements: An Instrument
Description: The user will strike a shrill note on their instrument and increase the pitch beyond its maximum with chakra. This can either be used to annoy someone or cause them pain or its more common use. Raising the pitch so high that only animals can hear it, this will effectively stop any animals in the vicinity.

[B]Background:Hatuke, so far had what one could consider a interesting life. The Gokuin family had a long standing tradition, in which one would be proved to be a ninja through either destiny or luck. In the Gokuin family, each member had to survive 3 straight days in the Forest of Death. If they manage they will be instructed personally before entering the academy to have a slight advantage. Hatuke was escorted to the location by one of his older brothers. He was left on top of the tower in the middle.

When they reached the tower it was already sun set so all he did that day was looking at the stars most of the night and wishing himself luck the next day. As the second day arrived, he was well rested and ready to gather some supplies. He knew nothing about survival in those days but he knew that food and water won't be delivered too soon. Leaving the tower, he headed for a nearby lake, and drank a little of the water. Not a good idea, but it was the best he had. Nearby being some berries to collect. The start was good but unfortunately, all good things must come to a end.

The forest had some wild animals such as wolfs and he never had luck until that day. Coming near him was, what seemed like a teenager wolf. Unexperienced in hunting but could still kill him. When Hatuke turned, the wolf leaped at him and put him on the ground, slashing him with one of his claws two times above the nose, thus resulting his scar. He was lucky to be saved by a certain man. He apparently shot some fire bullets towards it and scared it off, saving Hatuke in the process.

Although he would of preferred to die. The ninja, which he founded out that was a chunnin saved him just to give him bad news. His family seemed to be on the top of an assassination list, mostly because their specialty in ninjutsu and weapon combat. He was lucky enough that the house was not damaged in the process so he still had where to live. It was more of a small villa actually. Six chambers, each with three rooms designed specially into categories of the rank. Chunnin with chunnin, academy student with academy student. He managed a little in the forest. He just hoped that now he would manage without a family.

The rest of his live is not mostly interesting. Because he wouldn't manage too much without help, the chunnin that saved him helped him until he grew up and learned to do that himself and from him also began practicing using the flute and thought him a jutsu by using it. For him, he could be considered as a blessing.


Sample Post: Hatuke was staying in the courtyard of the university, with a flute in his hands, playing a gentle tune. He was no master at it but he had some experience with it. He was sitting on one of the swings tied to a tree, 50 years old he presume. Because classes were over and he really did not had anything to do at home he considered that sitting here and relaxing himself and afterwards some training would be a good idea.

The wind was blowing gently, and the leaves were swirling around him. He had his eyes closed and his hair tied in a ponytail. Relaxing seemed a good idea but it was getting boring quickly and he forgot to bring his weapon today. He barely carries it once or twice per weak and forgets it. Well at least he will not be disturbed and has the birds and the wind for company.

Shiyana
12-10-2007, 02:30
You need at least 4 Strengths and Weaknesses of each Physical and Mental, so a total of 20 items under there, 4 each or more... but balanced on each end.

I'm not sure if this is going to mean anything, but it'd be best to change wooden sword to Bokken. It's easier to see, since when some people take a glance, they just see sword, but do change the bottom part bolded below to wooden sword or bokken

Notes:
-Rarely carries the sword with him. Will carry it more often after progressing in rank Put this in items as a part of your descripstion
-Sample:Barely had anything to write so sorry. Remove
-Grammar:Got only 8.50 in English last year and using Firefox to spell check so sorry for bad grammar. Don't worry, we'll help you out, and remove please.

kinshoukamikaze
12-10-2007, 06:06
Height:1.35 centimeters

i believe you mean 135 x]

-Weak body

weak as in you can't take many hits, or you easily get bruised/bleed, or you have a weak immune system, or you have low stamina

Uta no Aki
Rank: D
Requirements: An Instrument
Description: The user will strike a shrill note on their instrument and increase the pitch beyond its maximum with chakra. This can either be used to annoy someone or cause them pain or its more common use. Raising the pitch so high that only animals can hear it, this will effectively stop any animals in the vicinity.

you don't have an instrument as a weapon so how are you gonna do this jutsu? hell, how did you learn it? lol x]

thats all for now~

Hatuke
12-10-2007, 11:24
Shiyana-Done. Added four for each category and I think it's pretty ballanced. I also changed the sword to Bokken.

Kin-
A)Done. Sorry 'bout that.
B)His body can't take to many hits and he bruises just a little easier then others.

C)Take a closer look mate. Also changed the history at the end to make the chunnin teach him.

demideviluk
12-10-2007, 11:41
Language:The language he grew up with is Rihukian and also knows a little Konoi.
Rikuhuu and Common
What is your reason for Konoi?
Main/Favored Weapon: In combat, he uses a wooden sword, as long as from the middle of his palm to his elbow.
I’d like to know a length (in proper measurements) and a rough weight
Side Arms: Except for his sword, Hatuke carries no weapons.

Element: The element Hatuke uses in battle is fire.
Maybe you could condense these two to ‘none’ and ‘fire’…it just makes it easier to skim.
his secondary is weapon Taijutsu.
Just put Taijutsu, we don’t separate them.
-Weak body
Can you elaborate; is this meant to be low endurance?
As it stands it could be taken in a number of different ways
-Body paralyzes every now and then.
I really need one general weakness rather than something that may or may not happen…considering you have 4 general strengths. Besides, you didn’t say the extent of this paralysis and how long it lasts, why it happens etc.
The left one is specially designed to carry his small silver flute, with the picture a red dragon
You mention this flute, but do not put it in your weapons. Place it in side arms at least.

Hatuke
12-10-2007, 12:12
A)You just never know when you can become a mercenary.
B)Finito.
C)Done
D)Roger
E)Finished
F)Edited.
G)Way ahead of you.

Jade-Star
12-10-2007, 12:45
Physical Strengths:
-Speed
-Stamina
-Reflexes
-Eyesight
Mental Strengths:
-Negotiations
-Hard to intimidate
-Can keep his temper under control
-Knowledge of other countries

Please put high, great, above average, etc. Assuming it's for his rank of course. Same with weaknesses for the one worders.

***

For the background, I suggest you should add more to it. But add a different paragraph about more to his life. Not just that one event.

Hatuke
12-10-2007, 12:55
A)Done

B)A little hard considering he only has ten and that I have one or two ideas for a students history.

Jade-Star
12-10-2007, 13:07
Physical Strengths:
-Speed(Very High)
-Stamina(Above Average)
-Reflexes(Above Average)
-Eyesight(Above Average)
Mental Strengths:
-Negotiations(Very High) Explain more.
-Hard to intimidate(High)
-Can keep his temper under control(Slightly above average)
-Knowledge of other countries(Above average)

Physical Weaknesses:
-Strength(Very high)
-Loses more blood then ussual(High)
-Weak body-Body bruises a little easier then others does and is not a good pal with pain.(Above average)
-Body paralyzes every now and then-Reasons:Unknow,Most likely has something to do with the past. It can last from 3 seconds to 5 minutes.(Above average)


Mental Weaknesses:
-Phobia of Height(High)
-Phobia of Water(High)
-Knows little of his own country and surroundings of it.(High)
-Intimidating skills(Above average)

No, you didn't have to put it for all of them. Just the one worders. I mean, you don't have to put high for phobia of height. You either are or aren't. The bold should be the only ones that describes its level. Otherwise, remove.

Hatuke
12-10-2007, 13:10
Done. Anything else?

Hitoshura
12-10-2007, 14:08
-Knows little of his own country and surroundings of it.(High)

You mentioned something about being a mercenary to explain why you knew a bit of Konoi, but as a mercenary, you would travel a lot. How would you not have knowledge of even your own country?

-Phobia of Water(High)

A phobia is an unnatural fear of something, so hydrophobia is going to be a serious hindrance when you try to learn water walking. I am not saying that this is not an acceptable weakness, but you might want to seriously think about if you will be able to RP this as a genin learning water walking.

For Chakra Kami Nawa are you just going to cut some of your own hair for it or what? This is more out of curiosity than anything else.

-Loses more blood then ussual(High)

I'm also wondering exactly why you lose more blood than normal? Does it not clot properly so it takes longer to stop the blood exiting a wound?

Hatuke
12-10-2007, 14:15
A)Thats for the future. Chunnin rank or higher then going merc.
B)That was pretty much the idea of the two phobias. He won't learn water walking until I can find a way to make him get rid of it Ic.
C)For the jutsu:Pain is the reason for success. But since I'm not that satanist I think I'll make him have a kunai. Will hurt him either way.
D)Yep.

demideviluk
12-10-2007, 14:21
Language:Rihukuu(Common) and a bit of Konohi
Rikuhuu AND Common…common is the language everyone speaks.
I deny you any Konoi for now because you have no background reason for knowing the language and your only an AS, at the age of 10 it is highly unlikely you are going to have come into great contact with Konoi.
-Body paralyzes every now and then-Reasons:Unknow,Most likely has something to do with the past. It can last from 3 seconds to 5 minutes.(Above average)
I still don’t like this…how often does it occur, because only it happens a lot…it simply doesn’t work for me.

Hatuke
12-10-2007, 14:28
Changed the paralization since I was running out of ideas with it also and took out Konohi. How about now?

demideviluk
12-10-2007, 19:02
o.O I'm wondering...Can I make same character? I mean can I make RPG character here...I need something special or I can just make it ?:confused:

This is completly the wrong place to be asking questions...what possessed you to spam somebody elses application?
To answer your question, yes you can create your own character, follow this template (http://www.theninja-forum.com/Vbulletin/showthread.php?t=46) and then post it just like this person has.

edit:
I'll PM him this as well...so when a mod comes through, id appreciate these two posts to be perma-deleted.
Also, nobody reply to these two posts <.<

edit 2:
I also apoligise to Hatuke for having to suffer such spam *le sigh*

Hatuke
13-10-2007, 10:48
Suffer?!? Hell, me posta, i tu spama....Perma-delete this one though mods.

demideviluk
13-10-2007, 11:11
-Weak body-Body bruises a little easier then others does and is not a good pal with pain.(Above average)
Badly worded, go for something like ‘fragile body’.
-Strength(Very high)
-Loses more blood then usual(High)
Get rid of everything in the brackets, because you make it sound like he is good at them rather than weak.
Instead put ‘Very weak’ or ‘very low strength’ for your strength weakness…and the other one is just fine…although I’m not sure how Anki will see it. Since that weakness bugs me whenever I see it lol



And dont spam <.<

Hatuke
13-10-2007, 11:57
Done and I don't make any promises.

demideviluk
13-10-2007, 11:59
You dont need to make promises, it is a rule of the board not to spam, spamming will result in your banning ^^

And on that note,
1/2 stamped

Hatuke
13-10-2007, 12:03
I know and so far I've been on like 20 forums and only once ban temp for about 2 days. Forgot why. Well want to see if I can break the record of 17 forums. Anyway now to see which mod/admin to bring in here with candy.

Edit:God....I need some memory pills. I forgot to add a key equipment at his appearance that will be useful later. It's at the end of the appearance.

demideviluk
14-10-2007, 12:29
When you say 'silver' do you mean metal or just greyish kinda colour?

Hatuke
14-10-2007, 12:32
The second one.

demideviluk
14-10-2007, 12:35
Yeah, thats fine otherwise I had a ton of questions in store for ya ^^

Just gotta wait for another person with stamping ability to come along...
Anki's laptop has blown up, so she wont be on as much <.<

Hatuke
14-10-2007, 12:37
I expected nothing less.

Hmmm...*Thinks how many mods he will get by changing the thread title to "To all you American infidels, Judgment has come"!* Think I can get at least half of the forum on this thread.

demideviluk
16-10-2007, 10:26
bumping to get attention...need the other half stamp <.<

Hatuke
16-10-2007, 14:05
This reminds me of the "good" ol' days on a RPG forum....Anyway*Goes kidnapping someone*

Anki
17-10-2007, 16:00
Stamped

Accepted & Moved


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