[satogakure] ryuuko, inazuma [genin]

[kakashixxx12]

Name: Ryuuko, Inazuma

Nickname: wired wolf

Family/Friends: Clan: Ryuuko, Hikari/ Ryuuko,Victor/ Ryuuko Leera-Kemuri/ Ryuuko, Valiant/ Ryuuko, Eiji/ Tanaki, Sarutobi

Age: 11

Gender: male

Height: 147 cms

Weight: 47 kg

Appearance:-Hair- white hair that covers his ears
-Eye- blue
-Skin-white not ghost white but white
-Fingers/toes- normal but thin
-Nails- he bites his nails when he gets nervous but it’s a bad habit and he does try not to.
-Scars/tattoos-none at the moment
-Body- not too muscular but he is quite fit and fast
-Other things- he wears a skull necklace with 2 diamond eye’s from his uncle who died in a ninja war.
-Clothes- hoodies, jeans, shorts, T shirts, whatever is lying on the ground. But Inazuma tends to wear a lucky green hoodie and some black shorts
http://www.theninja-forum.com/Vbulletin/picture.php?albumid=71&pictureid=570

Clan: Ryuuko

Level/Rank: Genin

Village: Sato

Language: Common (Sati Accent), Sati (Fluent) and Sign Language (common).

WEAPONS

Main/Favored Weapon :( coming soon to forums near you!)

85 ft of exploding wire (http://www.theninja-forum.com/Vbulletin/showpost.php?p=1196998&postcount=1) on each arm

ping ring: (http://theninja-forum.com/Vbulletin/showpost.php?p=709415&postcount=1) blue on his right middle finger, and green on his left middle finger, and the red one is on his necklace.

Side Arms:
Front Right Pocket
- 5 kunai, 5 kunai made of exploding metal so total 10 kunai.
- 5 shuriken (4 star), 5shuriken (6 star)
- 10 senbon needles made of exploding metal (http://www.theninja-forum.com/Vbulletin/showpost.php?p=1196998&postcount=1)
-15 senbon needles made of normal metal

Back Right Pocket
- 25 oz. squirt bottle of water
Front Left Pocket
- A lighter
- Multi tool (2” – contains scissors, tweezers, knife, magnifying glass, toothpick, and screw driver)
- bandages (4 rolls)


Back Left Pocket
- Ointment (for his joints)
1 water pill, 1 soldier pill, 1 blood pill.
Some food ie a sandwich and some dumplings
5 stink bombs.

On his back
2 Fuuma Shuriken 1 normal and 1 made of exploding metal (http://theninja-forum.com/Vbulletin/showpost.php?p=709415&postcount=1), a Ninja Sword
Features:
Forged carbon steel black ninja blade
Hand honed (Sharpened)
Black Square tsuba
Black tsuka ito with faux black rayskin
Black lacquered saya with shinobi symbol
Saya features hidden removeable breathing tube

Measurements:

Blade: 24"
Tsuka: 5"
Overall: 30"
Weight: 1.2 Lbs

http://www.swordsoftheeast.com/ProductImages/musashi/Musashi_Shinobi_Ninja_Sword.jpg


Special Items: he wears a skull necklace with 2 diamond eyes from his uncle who died in a ninja war.

Element: Raiton (Lightning Release)

Fighting Preference: ninjutsu specialist

Fighting Style: long distance fighter usually uses his wires to manipulate his weapons and thus take out the enemy.

S & W and Justus

Physical Strengths:
- Good speed
- Really good agility
- Excellent chakra pools
-good sense of smell
-above average swordsman


Physical Weaknesses:
- Terrible immune system (poisons last x3 more posts)
- Bad joints (tends to have sore joints, probably some sort of arthritis which gets worse in cold temperatures.)
-bad endurance (so fast he's not used to really getting hit)
-Bad bleeder if he gets a bad cut he can bleed out rather quickly takes about 4 posts to die or lose conscious through blood loss
-bad sneaking
-bad stamina


Mental Strengths:
-above average weapon knowledge
-Above average Perseverance
-good reflexes
-good pain tolerance


Mental Weaknesses:
- Below average nerves- he gets very anxious or over excited
-bad perception of character (Too trusting)
-bad manners he isn't very civil since he has lived in the woods all his life.
-not social

Fake weaknesses and strengths
-Cant kill female animals and even killing kunoichi is hard for him (but he will still do it but only in extreme conditions) - he has a lot of respect for females because of his mother.
-will be the kage of sato one day
-will do anything too protect his friends and family


JUTSU
Common Jutsu(s):
Henge no Jutsu
Bunshin no Jutsu
Kawarimi no Jutsu
Nawanuke

E/D justu(s):
Ikimono Benkou [Animal Speech] Rank: E
Requirements: None.
Description: This allows the user to learn the speech of a specific type of species or species (ie, cat, dog, bird, bug etc) deviating from the user. Meaning, that this jutsu is needed to speak to any species of animal/insect/reptile, that is different from the user. This is commonly used for pets to better to communicate. ( For canids- wolves, dogs, foxes, etc.)

Souharigane no Jutsu [Wire Manipulation Technique]
Rank: D
Requirements: Wire.
Description: By injecting chakra into the wire, the user is able to manipulate the wires actions much like a puppet and can control it’s movements to an incredible extent. This ability does not require handseals.

Genjutsu:

Kiga [Hunger]
Rank: D
Requirements: None.
Description: The opponent is overcome by a sudden hunger and will be unable to concentrate fully because of this urge to find food; those who are weak against Genjutsu may even find themselves in a condition where they feel like they are lethargic due to this.
Post Count: 2 posts.


C jutsus:
-free slot

Raiton: Kaminari Waia- Shokku [Lightning Release: Lightning Wire Shock]
Rank: C (same as above)
Requirements: Any kind of electricity-conducting wire or chain.
Description: This is a technique where the user attempts to conduct an electrical shock through a wire reaching to his target. Though this could be done at a lower rank, only this class of difficulty allows the user to create enough effect for a harmful electrical current. This jutsu does require the use of handseals.


B jutsus:
-free slot

Background:
Pre-Academy

Inazuma had a very normal up bringing his parents where hunters although they never hunted female animals only males. Inazuma’s parents believed that if they killed females they would be leaving baby animals alone and orphaned so they only hunted male animals. They also protected the animals killing poachers and people just there to slaughter. They usually found baby animals abandoned because of those poachers and would bring them back to their home to nurse them back to health. Inazuma didn’t like harming any animals although he knew his parents did it causing no pain to the animal. He swore not to become a hunter, one day Inazuma’s parents brought back a wolf cub surprisingly big for a new born puppy, unlike the other animals that Inazuma had cared about but had already accepted that they must be released back to the wild. This one was different immediately they bonded and since the pup was so young and had never learned anything from his mother Inazuma asked his parents if he could keep him. His parents said yes knowing that when they’re son became a shin obi him and Mack (what Inazuma named the puppy) would form a tight bond and would protect each other.

Inazuma had dreamed of becoming a shinobi as long as he could remember. When he turned 8 he went to the academy and excelled because of being from such a powerful clan he had always used weapons and ninjutsu came naturally to him. He couldn’t wait to graduate and become a full fledged member of the clan.

Academy

Inazuma breezed through his academy years he was so good it only took 2 years, he was now a genin he knew that demons where trying to take over the world and that he had to help stop them. To do that he needed to get stronger he trained a lot trying to think up new jutsu and weapons and as he did, he would ask the Ryuuko blacksmith to make them so he could defeat the demon's and save the world. Inazuma managed to get into plenty of spars and classes he almost killed Hikari once which he wasn't proud of but figured he would hold it against her one day, he had gotten a lot faster and better at taijutsu as well thanks to Hikari's tutoring.


Sample Post:

Inazuma waits in the bush for the Buck to get in line with his trap…. *thwack* the wire suddenly raps around the deer the second it got within 2 inches of it, suddenly Mack lunges at the deer’s neck attempting to kill it but misses. Inazuma constricts the deer and then when it’s dead carves it and brings the meat home.

when he got home he said hi to his mother and asked where his dad was she said oh he’s talking to the clan leader about some poachers that we captured they killed a whole pack of deer and there where over 20 of them your father wants them executed but they will probably go to prison. I’m going to bed ok mom here's the meat from a buck in the forest that you asked me to get. "Okay Inazuma now go to bed" said his mom.

[kakashixxx12]

bumpidy bump

[Urbanninja]

Physical Strengths:
- good speed +3
- really good agility+4
- Excellent chakra pools [+5]
-good sense of smell +2
-very good swordsman +3
total=17


Physical Weaknesses:
- terrible imune system(poisons last x3 more posts)-5

- bad joints(tends to have sore joints, probably some sort of arthritis which gets worse in cold temperatures.) -2

-bad endurance (so fast he's not used to really getting hit)-2

-Bad bleeder if he gets cut he can bleed out rather quickly takes 2 posts less than average to die or lose conscious through blood loss -2

- bad at taijutsu -2 not a valid weakness your a ninjutsu specialist your always bad at tai also if you have this you cannot have very good swordsman skill as close range weapons like that are a form of tai, but if this is removed your swordsman skills makes sense...

-bad sneaking -2

-bad sensitive smell -2 fake weakness when your good with smells...
-
total=17


Mental Strengths:
-really good against genjutsu +4 (i dont know what this will give me could a mod tell me?) it makes it great(not really good) at countering genjutsu's by knowing when your in a jutsu faster then most would I think at this level it's -3 or /2

- above average Perseverance+1 (never gives up) self perseveration means he want to keep himself unscarred and alive, meaning he wants to live more then most not 'never gives up'...

-Group leader – inazuma is calm and collective and would be a good group leader.+1 Iffy on you being leader, hikari is calm and collective while akara is already bossy and Eiji doesn't like to be told what to do. You'll have to fight for that title and I say it ain't going to be easy...

- mature for his age +1 yes and no remember to RP maturely Eiji will taunt you no matter what so you'll have to RP accordingly...
total= 6

Mental Weaknesses:
- very bad nerves( he gets very nervous anxious).-he gets so nervous to the stage he cant stop shaking he bites his nails till he nearly shreds his fingers-3 I have yet to see this also...

-bad perception of character (Too trusting) [-2] hardly seen in some posts, just remember to RP this way

-bad manners he isn't very civil since he has lived in the woods all his life. -1

-not very social -1
total=6

fake weaknesses
-cant kill female animals and even killing kunoichi is hard for him( but he will still do it but only in extreme conditions)- he has alot of respect for females because of his mother.

-will be the kage of sato one day (naruto) believe it!

-will do anything too protect his friends and family

[kakashixxx12]

Physical Strengths:
- good speed +3
- really good agility+4
- Excellent chakra pools [+5]
-good sense of smell +2
-very good swordsman +3
total=17


Physical Weaknesses:
- terrible imune system(poisons last x3 more posts)-5

- bad joints(tends to have sore joints, probably some sort of arthritis which gets worse in cold temperatures.) -2

-bad endurance (so fast he's not used to really getting hit)-2

-Bad bleeder if he gets cut he can bleed out rather quickly takes 2 posts less than average to die or lose conscious through blood loss -2

- bad at taijutsu -2 not a valid weakness your a ninjutsu specialist your always bad at tai also if you have this you cannot have very good swordsman skill as close range weapons like that are a form of tai, but if this is removed your swordsman skills makes sense... mod intervention again cause i mean like kicking/punching is bad

-bad sneaking -2

-bad sensitive smell -2 fake weakness when your good with smells... mod ntervention please
-
total=17


Mental Strengths:
-really good against genjutsu +4 (i dont know what this will give me could a mod tell me?) it makes it great(not really good) at countering genjutsu's by knowing when your in a jutsu faster then most would I think at this level it's -3 or /2 im gonna wait for a mod for this

- above average Perseverance+1 (never gives up) self perseveration means he want to keep himself unscarred and alive, meaning he wants to live more then most not 'never gives up'... just shutup i dont want to edit XD

-Group leader – inazuma is calm and collective and would be a good group leader.+1 Iffy on you being leader, hikari is calm and collective while akara is already bossy and Eiji doesn't like to be told what to do. You'll have to fight for that title and I say it ain't going to be easy...

- mature for his age +1 yes and no remember to RP maturely Eiji will taunt you no matter what so you'll have to RP accordingly...
total= 6

Mental Weaknesses:
- very bad nerves( he gets very nervous anxious).-he gets so nervous to the stage he cant stop shaking he bites his nails till he nearly shreds his fingers-3 I have yet to see this also... iveonly met academy students he'll get nervous againt demons, jounin, sanin, etc.

-bad perception of character (Too trusting) [-2] hardly seen in some posts, just remember to RP this way cause ive only met academy students...

-bad manners he isn't very civil since he has lived in the woods all his life. -1

-not very social -1
total=6

fake weaknesses
-cant kill female animals and even killing kunoichi is hard for him( but he will still do it but only in extreme conditions)- he has alot of respect for females because of his mother.

-will be the kage of sato one day (naruto) believe it! yeah dude!

-will do anything too protect his friends and family



i have edited in to the quote

[Ivory Deluge]

Personally, I think that's ALOT of stuff he's carrying. o.O There's nothing wrong with it, but bear in mind that all those items may slow him down.

Edit: Also, of course you're going to suck at Taijutsu if you're a Ninjutsu specialist. XD If you mean he's crappy at "kicking and punching" maybe you should put down that he has bad strength or can't fight in hand-to-hand battles.

Yet another edit. (http://www.theninja-forum.com/Vbulletin/showpost.php?p=1240448&postcount=12) >.> <.<

[kakashixxx12]

ok thanks i need help with a physical weakness that gives me -2 so you got any ideas????????

[demideviluk]

Hair( im so gonna get thwacked) white kind of like…… hitsugaya’s.
Yes you are, and since you already know this, you lose brownie points for being an annoyance.
Fix it.
Appearance
Does he not wear clothes? lol
I mean, sure he may not wear the exact same outfit all the time, but I highly doubt you want to be describing a default outfit at the beginning of every thread.
Sign Language
Of what?
I mean...differant languages have differant signs xD
S&W
I'm so glad people use completely random numbers and then pair them up to the wrong words anyway. Way to make moderator life difficult, because frankly, your numbers mean nothing because we dont use that system.
So yeah, sort it out.
- bad at hand to hand combat-2
I can accept this, but it will be considered a tier or so lower in terms of balancing, because users are already weaker at tai. And this is one example of why you shouldnt put numbers in, because you dont decide what balances what, we do.
JUTSU
You are using too many slots...
Genin (as far as i remember) have 5 slots plus the basics.
You are using 6 slots (3 E/D, 2 C, 1B)
Yup, I cant even work on your S/Ws because you are using a number system that doesnt even vaguely conform.

[kakashixxx12]

then just dont pay attention to the numbers i need them to give me a range of the level of good and bad i get confused with terrible being worse really bad


and ill edit the stuff and about the hair do i really need to change it????


and clothes really my guy's like a jungle boy so he's always naked........ fiiiiine ill change it

[Kambei Shimata]

I think what he was saying is that the numbers arent even correct in the first place so why use them if you dont know how they work. Even if your using them for yourself, you will probably think one thing is one number like good or very good and probably get the wrong numbers and make the app complicated so its easier not to use the numbers, if what i said made any sense to you lol.

I'm getting used to critiquing rpc's to help out so bare with me

[kakashixxx12]

ok ill erase the numbers and one question i cant make custom weapons or jutsu until im a genin right then i just have to add them to my profile with mod consent right?

[Kambei Shimata]

If i'm correct, custom jutsu are just like the genin basic jutsu you learn. you must train them first and get the training approved by a mod, then they add it for you on your profile once you get the training approved. of coarse the jutsu must get approved before hand.

As for the weapons, i think you just have to rp getting them if they are custom and they probably add it after as well, though i'm not sure on that one. I'll let a mod answer that.

[kakashixxx12]

ok so just run through it and see if anythings wrong thanks for the help

[Ivory Deluge]

and ill edit the stuff and about the hair do i really need to change it????


I understand that you think that Hitsugaya’s hair is cool and all, but TNF is really striving to avoid straight-up rips-offs. If you're simply comparing your rpc's hair color to the character's then it's really no big deal, but white is white. You really don't need to say it's "white like this guy's or that guy's" when it's just white. o.O

^^ Just get rid of "white like Hitsugaya's," and that should be okay.

[kakashixxx12]

ok changed is it good now ???XD

[Leera]

Height: 147 cms

Weight: 47 kg

Include feet and pounds off to the side for these, please?

100 ft of exploding wire (http://www.theninja-forum.com/Vbulletin/showpost.php?p=1196998&postcount=1) on each arm

ping ring: (http://theninja-forum.com/Vbulletin/showpost.php?p=709415&postcount=1) right middle finger You have 3 rings, it even says it in the link.

Side Arms:
-100 ft of exploding wire (http://www.theninja-forum.com/Vbulletin/showpost.php?p=1196998&postcount=1)

So this is in addition to the other 200 ft. of wire? Don't think you need that much at genin.

1 food pill and 1 water pill, 2 soldier pills, 2 blood pils.

...you're only allowed 3 pills total


On his back
2 Fuuma Shuriken 1 normal and 1 made of exploding metal (http://theninja-forum.com/Vbulletin/showpost.php?p=709415&postcount=1),a Ninja Sword
Features:
Forged carbon steel black ninja blade
Hand honed (Sharpened)
Black Square tsuba
Black tsuka ito with faux black rayskin
Black lacquered saya with shinobi symbol
Saya features hidden removeable breathing tube

Measurements:

Blade: 42"
Tsuka: 13"
Overall: 55"
Weight: 2.7 Lbs

Either explain, or you might need to submit for this in the weapons section

Mental Strengths:
-really good against genjutsu (i dont know what this will give me could a mod tell me?)

I'm pretty sure this isn't allowed if your a ninjutsu specialist

Comments in red.

[Kennyrules]

You are using too many slots...
Genin (as far as i remember) have 5 slots plus the basics.
You are using 6 slots (3 E/D, 2 C, 1B)

Nin specs get another E/D rank for free. He should declare which one is the free one, but he wasn't exceeding his slots.

[demideviluk]

That is a fair point Kenny, I've been forgeting about the specialist rules recently. Somebody only needed to remind me, it's not like I'm correct 100% of the time.

For my own note, this cannot be approved until 2nd August 2010.
I'll critique when I feel up to it.

[kakashixxx12]

i thought i got accepted on the 28th?


and all the wire and weapons i have i need okay... and why do i need to submit the sword?

[Leera]

Because I couldn't even tell it was a sword with the way you had it layed out?

From all the detail you have there, it looks like it falls underneath this category:

Unique Weapons/Aesthetically Different Items: These weapons are merely custom weapons of other normally accepted weapons which are aesthetically altered. Or these weapons can be unlike normal conventional weapons and serve some unique purpose or imitate that of a standard item. They do not require the use of jutsu slots. They in no way should have any special abilities.

And if memory serves me correctly, you can't have a custom sword until chuunin.

And I still think that's way too much wire. Victor might have 200 feet, and he's almost EJ, Leera only has like...100 and she'll be jounin in a week. A Genin does not need 300 feet of wire.

Also, looking at your rank-up app, it was never actually accepted - I believe it's neither stamped or locked. And if it was, it was accepted about 2 weeks early.

[kyubichan]

i thought i got accepted on the 28th?


28th of May? Odd. Your AS thread creation date was June 02 (03 for me), and it was approved:


http://i732.photobucket.com/albums/ww326/LordoOfKrime/stamp-1.jpg
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@ Have fun!

- there. June 07? (08 for me)

Count two months from that.

[demideviluk]

Hair( im so not gonna get thwacked) white kind of like…… mineXD
I'm going to brutally honest, I have no idea what your hair looks like, neither do I care. Even if its just a brief description, describe it properly.
If you aren't going to take it seriously, then I'm not going to take you seriously, and I will just lock this application until you are allowed to be approved, rather than giving you the opportunity to iron things out.
100 ft of exploding wire on each arm
-100 ft of exploding wire
You are already carrying around alot of stuff...
I'm going to tell you 50 foot maximum total as your current loadout is concerned, although I can push this to 90 foot total if the loadout decreases a little.

After all 2 fuuma shuriken, 25 kunai, 40 shuriken and a sword just in themselves isnt exactly a light load.

In fact, as a nin spec, you are carrying a bit too many items for my liking.
a Ninja Sword
3.5 foot sword as a genin nin spec...you wish.
make it 2 foot and ill be more accepting.
JUTSU
I will admit to being wrong before, I had forgotten about the spec rules/not noticed you were a spec.
That extra slot is yours to keep, you should have bought that up xD
- very bad nerves( he gets very nervous anxious).-he gets so nervous to the stage he cant stop shaking he bites his nails till he nearly shreds his fingers
How can you be a calm and collecting group leader, and be a very nervous character at the same time. Contradictory much xD

And all I will say on your physical aspect, is that you dont balance out weakness wise, due to specific natures of a number of your weaknesses.

[Evelis]

really good against genjutsu (i dont know what this will give me could a mod tell me?)

I am not sure but I believe this can no longer be used as a strength... it can be used as a weakness, but some genjutsu only last one post and can never be less than that. If I had to give a number I would cap it at -2 post but always a minimum of one... Just so you know... I am against this strength. Sooow yah.

bad at hand to hand combat

but a very good swordsman? they do conflict, and if this means except when using a sword I would not really find this a true weakness...

Bad bleeder if he gets cut he can bleed out rather quickly takes 2 posts less than average to die or lose conscious through blood loss

yah... since there is no defining when a character dies or looses contiousness... this is meaningless. so instead be clear how long it takes before your character passes out from bloodloss when cut.

-bad manners he isn't very civil since he has lived in the woods all his life.
-not very social

at least the same category of weaknesses, if not the same... but that is just my opinion.

for now my remarks,

[kakashixxx12]

ok then miscalculated the dat then ok im not back till tomorrow so i just changeda couple of big things

[Evelis]

60 ft of exploding wire on each arm
-100 ft of exploding wire

still way to much as said before, lessen the 60 ft to 45, on each arm, and remove the 100 ft of extra wire.

Front Right Pocket
- 20 kunai, 5 kunai made of exploding metal so total 25 kunai.
- 10 shuriken (4 star),1shuriken (6 star)
- 50 senbon needles made of exploding metal
-100 ft of exploding wire

waay too many items, lessen the kunai to like 10 the senbon to a max of 20....

Measurements:

Blade: 32"
Tsuka: 7"
Overall: 49"
Weight: 1.7 Lbs

yah since I only really understand metric Imma not going to say much about the sword right now.

don't see that many changes to the strengths and weaknesses... so my previous post still stands...

[Archangel]

Are you sure you don't want another language? Also you should state how heavy the accent is.

[kakashixxx12]

how heavy the accent is wtf????


and im gonna get to the s/w's also its the world and i use metric system some times so yeah just check it up i dont have time since my main comp got a trojan while i was away so im stuck with my laptop

i need the wire i have wire is thin, right so its not heavy so why shouldnt i be able to carry alot ill change it to 65 per arm and no 100 ft coil how's that cause i really need the wire

also senbon are pretty small why cant i carry 50 i will lessen the amount of kunai though


Edit: ok i changed the weknesses items pretty much everything if you dont like metric that much i can change but i find it easier in metric

[Hitoshura]

It's not a matter of "How much can I carry?" It's "How much should I be carrying" At the moment you have enough items that your profile is imbalanced. If you were some kind of weapons specialist, then I could see allowing it. However, you aren't.

And please use grammar. It took me reading through your post three times before I knew exactly what you were trying to say.

[kakashixxx12]

yeah i realized it was pretty bad when i looked over it but im taking apart my desk top to fix it so im busy but im done for now

ok so what do you think of the weapons now??


EDIT: grrrr i hate mini laptops the keyboards so small

[Evelis]

Items:

Main/Favored Weapon:(coming soon to forums near you!)


Side Arms:

Front Right Pocket
- 10 kunai, 5 kunai made of exploding metal so total 15 kunai.
- 30 senbon needles made of exploding metal

waay too many items, lessen the kunai to like 10 the senbon to a max of 20....

Back Right Pocket
- 15 exploding tags
- 25 oz. squirt bottle of water

Front Left Pocket
- a lighter
- multi tool (2” – contains scissors, tweezers, knife, magnifying glass, toothpick, and screw driver)
- bandages (4 rolls)

Back Left Pocket
- ointment ( for his joints)
1 water pill, 1 soldier pill, 1 blood pill.
some rations(food) in your back left pocket?
5 stink bombs. Not to sure about the amount of bombs allowed for genin

On his back
2 Fuuma Shuriken 1 normal and 1 made of exploding metal,

a Ninja Sword
Features:
Forged carbon steel black ninja blade
Hand honed (Sharpened)
Black Square tsuba
Black tsuka ito with faux black rayskin
Black lacquered saya with shinobi symbol
Saya features hidden removeable breathing tube

will leave the ninja sword to a sword expert.. which I am not

-Group leader – inazuma is calm and collective and would be a good group leader

- below average nerves- he gets very anxious or over excited
-bad perception of character (Too trusting)
-bad manners he isn't very civil since he has lived in the woods all his life.
-not very social

all of your weaknesses sorta contradict that strength... I would still like to see a more stronger mental weakness... but that is just me...

for the rest well its basically repeating what I said so yah feel free to make edits or not....

[Kennyrules]

Ninja Sword
Features:
Forged carbon steel black ninja blade
Hand honed (Sharpened)
Black Square tsuba
Black tsuka ito with faux black rayskin
Black lacquered saya with shinobi symbol
Saya features hidden removeable breathing tube

Okay. Let's iron this out. For those who don't know:

tsuba = sword guard/that thingy that separates the hilt from the bladed sharp part of the sword.

Tsuka = sword hilt

Saya = sword sheath


My only question about this is regarding the "breathing tube" in the saya portion. Could you explain that in more detail?

Edit: also, if you could add in some dimensions, such as the length of the hilt and the length of the blade, that would be perfect.

[Evelis]

Measurements:

Blade: 32"
Tsuka: 7"
Overall: 49"
Weight: 1.7 Lbs

He already did that... its in a spoiler just below the weapon....

[Kambei Shimata]

The only question i have is how can this be a weakness, even just a fake one.

-will be the kage of sato one day.

dont really see that as a weakness, even if its a fake one since doesnt make much sense either way but other than that i think its just about good to go. Hope this gets accepted soon ^^.

[Kennyrules]

He already did that... its in a spoiler just below the weapon....

Well nevermind then. Guess that just leaves the "breathing tube" question.

[Evelis]

3.5 foot sword as a genin nin spec...you wish.
make it 2 foot and ill be more accepting.

what are the current dimensions.. cause it looks like it grew instead of gotten smaller?

[Hitoshura]

The blade right now is 2.66 ft. Still longer than Demi asked it to be reduced to.

[kakashixxx12]

ok ill reduce it more and the breathing is the size of the handle its just like a tube so i can use it like a snorkel under water

and the kage thing is all just fake stuff just to make me more unique you dont need to pay attention to those

[kyubichan]

Measurements:

Blade: 25"
Tsuka: 5"
Overall: 30"
Weight: 1.2 Lbs

*pats*

o.o;;;

Demi said 2-foot.

1 foot = 12 inches

25 / 12 = 2 r. 1, which would be 2.1-foot of blade

2-foot = 24 inches ( 24" )

[kakashixxx12]

and being un social meaning he doesnt like to mmet people etc and him seeing no problem with running around a party with no clothes on are very different things


his leader ship is going to get better as he ranks up so that one day i can take control of sato hehehe but like probably by jounin ill change the perception of character to he trusts no one depending on his story


oh and sorry i miscalculated by one inch.....

[Evelis]

the only issue that I now have left is that you have 26 items that are made of exploding metal and 15 exploding tags, that gives you a grand total of 41 exploding items... and 85 ft of exploding wire.

I think that is too much for a genin. can you at the least lessen the exploding tags to say a nice number of 5 Or at best remove them all?

and if you would not mind say changing one of the mental weaknesess to say for instance below average pain tollerance or something of that ilk I think you can have at least my seal of approval.

soow yay almost there...

[Urbanninja]

wouldn't matter Evelis can't approve him tell next... friday or sunday, I can't remember. Kakashi what I can see a problem with is the leadership. It honestly won't help your, your three teammates aren't going to make that easy... Space is more qualified as a leader then all three of us Archs character is bossy know it all and will go hand in hand with Hikari, and Me...well I love to **** around ICly and won't listen to my 'little cuz'...

[Evelis]

but he might also rp with other people

not that I think you are wrong about the leadership strength... its seems... unneeded to me... Me personally would not choose it.

[Urbanninja]

I'm just trying to help him by telling him another strength would be wiser for his genin life

[Evelis]

and I was agreeing with you... ^^

[kakashixxx12]

fine i wont put it as a strength but eiji know this i was making my chars ic personality completely different to mine irl if you have ever met my char in tnr before i was tavy banned for being too pervy all the time i would blow you away and believe me ive got some things in store for you XD....XD....XD.....XD.........


but what should i replace it with

[Urbanninja]

your a ninjutsu specialist why do you have good at genjutsu?

[kakashixxx12]

because i have 1 genjutsu

or cant i do that?

[Leera]

I don't think you can say "good at genjutsu" if you're a nin-spec...

I'm not arguing this, because I'm not sure what the rule is, but can you have a genjutsu as a nin-spec, or is that where the rule about it being below your own rank comes in?

[Hitoshura]

While there is no rule against it, I'm still going to question it.

Why do you have that strength as a nin specialist? Being a specialist means that's what you are an expert in, at the cost of sucking at the other two.

[kakashixxx12]

no its not at the cost of sucking at the other two look at kakshi for example he's good at everything,but specializes in genjutsu. naruto is good at nin and tai but sucks at genjutsu


and if your looking for an ic answer it because my char got tutored by hikari who uses genjutsu



EDIT: ok i read my other question thread ill probably just edit it to some thing else unless you think i can do it

[Leera]

You realize everything here isn't exactly the same as the anime or manga, correct? We're not here to be complete copy-cats of Naruto.

I personally think it's hax to be nin-spec and say you're "good at genjutsu", if you want that then switch to Nin/Gen instead of Nin-Spec.

[Hitoshura]

I will ignore all cannon references since they have no place here. We are NOT in any way shape of form, cannon.

Anyway, I'll give you a few options here, as a nin specialist shouldn't be adept at Genjutsu.
1. Keep it as it is, but have it balance as a higher ranked strength. Probably Great.
2. Change it to something less potent, like your genjutsu is slightly more realistic.
3. Get rid of it all together.

[kakashixxx12]

ok so like that?


and is there anyhting else?

[Hitoshura]

Yes, I question how exactly you want to use your sword as a snorkel. I keep trying to imagine it in my head and, while the images do make me chuckle, I have no idea how it will actually work.

[kakashixxx12]

the brathing tube is in the handle there a whole at the bottom where it comes out like a hidden compartment

[Hitoshura]

But....it'd be such a small tube. I can't imagine it helping much more than say, a bendy straw.

[kakashixxx12]

its pretty wide i actually had the sword i picked for tnf a little while ago thats what made me think of it, i bought it online. and the tube is big enough it fits into the sword very tightly and is about the size of the a very oversized straw

[Hitoshura]

Then explain it to me. If the hilt is only 5" long, how can any reasonable sized unbent tube be placed within?

[kakashixxx12]

well you see thats the thing when the sword got shorter it ruined it but you could just say it bended in half in the handle making it 10 inches long

[Hitoshura]

Then that's all I've got. However, I feel the need to wait for someone else to OK everything. I'm having a hard time translating what you mean in some spots due to grammar issues.

[kakashixxx12]

like what ill change or explain it?

[capoeiragreen]

Can you please clean your academy bio please? It seems like it's just two long run-on sentences. But that is an example of a "grammer spot" that Hito maybe talking about.

[kakashixxx12]

Yeah no prob, i just didnt assume you guys where so picky on grammar here.

[Kambei Shimata]

Well get used to since if the grammar is bad enough that you could be saying 3 different things or just doesnt make sense at all, people will tell you to rewrite something so just try not to have grammar errors all over the place or at least none that are a problem. try reading your stuff out loud to yourself to see if it makes sense, i do that sometimes but thats me lol. we all make grammar mistakes so it doesnt need to be perfect, just readable i guess.

[Evelis]

will accept it to..

but we will have to wait for the proper date before you can actually turn genin, wich I my guestemation will be at august 7/8

[kakashixxx12]

ok so does a mod want to stamp and lock this then on the date move this and mack both are in my sig now to the appropiate place

changed a mental strength from mature for his age to above average pain tolerance

can i have 5 more senbon please? i was just reading about some jutsu and stuff, got some battle ideas but i need at least 25 and i mean 5 more shouldn't be that big of a deal right?

[kyubichan]

Go ahead and add that in.

The approving mod will look over the profile one more time, or at least he'll look at the last few crits.

[Evelis]

25 senbon needles made of exploding metal

erm you can have 25 senbon, but not all made of exploding metal, cause that would give you 25 explosive tags, and you already have 5 exploding tagged kunai....

So I would suggest a max of 10 senbon made of exploding metal.

[kakashixxx12]

ok so if there not all exploding can i have 10 exploding and 20 normal

[Evelis]

I think you have enough weapons as a genin Nin spec

[kakashixxx12]

yeah but ive seen people (genin) with like 50 senbonand senbon are miniature please is it really that bad

[Evelis]

I think you have enough weapons as a genin Nin spec

I guess repeating what I already said... seems the best solution

[kakashixxx12]

grrrrrrr fine

[demideviluk]

Okay, that bleeding weakness has become a valid weakness, and is actually managing to make the physicalness equal. Good job on that.
-More realistic genjutsu- His genjutsu is more realistic, so it’s harder for people to figure out if it’s actually a genjutsu.
He's a nin specialist...
Stop trying to be a gen spec lol
-above average against genjutsu (he realizes when something is a genjutsu faster than others)
Thats not really something somebody can actually do as a strength...
And even if it was, it'd be for a gen user.
-not very social
Make that into a weakness lol
"not very social" could theoretically mean he is "social" lol...just needs rewording.

I still think you are carrying far too much weaponry for a nin spec.
But I can forego that, although I would rather you had your wire cut back to something more like 120 foot, rather than 170 foot.

[kakashixxx12]

okay got rid of the genjutsu stuff and im from a wire clan i need my wire please

and i made a mental strength saying i have knowledge of weapons to sort of justify my weapons i can change that to be good and make pain tolerance above average if you want.

[Evelis]

Meh.... The wire I can understand...

I feel it will suffice for the time being. So Approved as far as I am concerned

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