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Azure
17-06-2008, 06:39
Critts/Suggestions/Advice/etc. Needed!

I'd like to see this on the standard Jutsu list, failing that I'll submit it as a custom Jutsu.

Name: Makyō Hyō Shō [Demonic Ice Crystal Mirrors]

Requirements: N/A

Rank: B

Type: Elemental Ninjutsu

Element: Hyouton

Fighting Style: Physical

Range: Short to Mid Range (0-12 meters)

Description:
After performing the few required hand seals, the user begins to chill the air around them, and then form a dome of twenty-one ice mirrors in an approximate 10 meter radius around their opponent(s) trapping them inside.

Each ice mirror has a height of 7 feet, a width of 3 feet and a depth of 1 foot, and are arranged so that there are twelve ice mirrors at ground level, eight above the first twelve that are on a 45 degree angle toward the ground, and one final mirror above the rest that faces directly at the ground.

Once all of the ice mirrors have been fully formed the user can enter into any of the ice mirrors and have their exact image reflected in every ice mirror.

Each ice mirror can withstand up to three medium strikes or one heavy strike before they shatter, falling into large shards of ice. A Kunai will do little damage whilst a standard Shuriken or Senbon will cause little to no more than small scratches and/or chips.

All standard elemental resistances and weaknesses apply.

Perks:
Whilst travelling between the ice mirrors, the users movements become extremely hard to keep track of, as they become a barely visable blur of motion.

The user can launch physical attacks and cast Jutsu from inside an ice mirror unhindered as if they were not inside it at all.

Pitfalls:
If by chance the particular ice mirror that the user is currently residing in is broken, it shall inflict half the amount of damage to any and all of their person that occupied it at the time in the form of blunt trauma, breaking the users conentration, and therefore ending the jutsu.

Individual ice mirrors cannot be automatically replaced when broken; to do this the Jutsu would need to be stopped and cast again from scratch, or another Jutsu that could create said replicas would need to be employed.

This technique drains a moderate amount of chakra to maintain, therefore the user must either spend a B-rank worth of chakra every other post, or their movement speed will be reduced by 1 level on every other post (eg. average becomes below average becomes bad, and etc.) making them easier to track and attack.
(All levels of reduction are removed in the case of the user renewing the Jutsu's chakra)

After Effects:
All gained perks are lost when the Jutsu is ended.

All gained negative effects continue to hinder the user after the Jutsu is ended for a period equal to the amount of posts since it was last renewed, reducing at the same rate they were gained.

Training Time:
7 pages = Basic Knowledge
10 pages = One Handseal Required - OHR
13 pages = Half Concentration Required - HCR
16 pages = Chakra Consumption Halved - CCH

Ronin, Ryozo
17-06-2008, 07:42
Yah, it's Haku, and the jutsu rank is A

Azure
17-06-2008, 10:46
The origional Jutsu was A ranked, but I toned it down a bit. In the original Jutsu, the ice mirrors were almost completely immune to fire, and it also allowed the user the ability to move extremely fast and see in slow motion. I was thinking that maybe if these attributes were taken out of the Jutsu, then perhaps it would be downgraded to a B rank, as there is a B rank Jutsu that allows the last two..
Washihishou no Jutsu (Eagle Flight Technique)
Rank:B
Description: This technique is an enhancer. The user pumps charka into their muscles to allow for a heightened burst of speed and they also use their charka to enhance their visual awareness, making it sharper and more effective.

Also; I know that Haku created the original Jutsu in the cannon, I meant I do not know who the creator would be in the RP if it were to be accepted..

demideviluk
17-06-2008, 13:28
Theres already a Doton version of this I believe lol

And they would have to be significantly reworded if people really did want them on the list.

Shiyana
17-06-2008, 17:34
Though they are made from ice, the mirrors are pressured with enough chakra to give a good resistance to fire.

You'll need to elaborate on this part. Since you are trying to tone it down, but it still says good resistance. Good is relative... Any type of example that could break through it (jutsu or rank)

Azure
19-06-2008, 14:18
As I am still kinda new to this site (five months..), and this is my first experience in RPing, I am still learning the dynamics of Chakra/Jutsu usage.

I am not sure on how resilliant Hyouton Jutsu normaly are against Katon Jutsu, but this should be a little stronger than normal.. Any suggestions for improvement anybody?

demideviluk
26-06-2008, 14:33
The thing is...we dont want people making Haku Clones.
Although his other unique jutsu has been accepted before.

Doton: Awasekagami [Earth mirrors]
Requirements: N/A
Rank: A
A three staged jutsu:
First stage- the user create a one sided ‘mirror’ of earth( the entry side is where the user is, and the exit side is where the user sets it to be and the mirror is then used as a portal between the two sides). This ‘mirror’ allows the user to send any physical attack, from the entry ‘mirror’ to the exit ‘mirror’ only on the exit side the attack is copied by earth and that is what hits.(the earth can’t be sustained long in this stage.)
Second stage- the same ‘mirror like in the first stage, only this time the attacks can be longer and could still be made by the exit ‘mirror’ (is used for binding and such).
Third stage- this stage, like the first one, has the same ‘mirror’ effect, only it is able to send attacks that are not necessarily physical, such as jutsus. And also this stage, allows real body transfer, meaning it can be used as a teleporting device, or to throw real things from one place to another.

We have an earth version very similar if it helps.

Shiyana
26-06-2008, 16:25
As I am still kinda new to this site (five months..), and this is my first experience in RPing, I am still learning the dynamics of Chakra/Jutsu usage.

I am not sure on how resilliant Hyouton Jutsu normaly are against Katon Jutsu, but this should be a little stronger than normal.. Any suggestions for improvement anybody?

I'd say a Goukakyou would be able to melt it, but a Housenka wouldn't since it's dispersed... so... any concentrated C-ranked fire jutsu would be able to melt it, but keep in mind that you can still cut it with other things.

Nekomata Kayangelus
26-06-2008, 19:46
Goukakyou is a C-rank jutsu.

Saying a C-rank katon can melt when a B-rank can't, is kinda weird.

What you need more details on:

Travel: Speed, how you move, can you go into the mirrors, etc.
Endurance: How much damage can each mirror take. Remember, that you have 21 mirrors. If each can withstand a B-rank jutsu of the same element as it, than the whole jutsu can withstand 21 B-rank jutsu. That would put it pretty much as an S-ranked jutsu.

Shiyana
26-06-2008, 19:51
Housenka is C-rank as well... o.o

Azure
01-07-2008, 18:06
To save any further messing around (or racking my brain any further), I removed the raised Katon resistance completely. The Jutsu now has standard Hyouton properties/resistances to everything.

On the other hand, I did put in a speed increase whilst moving between mirrors, and slow motion vision whilst inside the mirrors.

I wasn't sure on how much faster the user should be able to go (+ 2 levels? +1 rank?)

Azure
30-07-2008, 16:23
*Bump* 0.0

I've done some more work on this Jutsu, any critts/suggestions/advice?

Shiyana
30-07-2008, 18:03
Please explain what you mean by +2 levels... what levels are these... or do you mean rank?

demideviluk
30-07-2008, 18:48
I think he means by +2 levels of your strengths.
For example good would become excellent.

Shiyana
30-07-2008, 18:57
Alright then... Does eyesight stay the same? or does it worsen along with movement? (This is after the enhancement and then the movement begins to worsen)

Azure
31-07-2008, 01:19
I think he means by +2 levels of your strengths.
For example good would become excellent.This is correct.

The enhancement to the users eye-sight stays the same, but is only applicable while they are inside a mirror, it is instantly lost when their eyes leavs the mirror. Only their movement speed degrades with the strain of maintaining the jutsu.

Azure
05-11-2008, 01:25
*Necro Post no Jutsu*

Yes that's right, I'm draging this up out of it's grave and reviving it! >:]

I've made a few adjustments to it; I've put more detail into the description, further developed the chakra drain pitfall and added some after effects.

Please let me know if this is okay, or if I've just made it too confusing..

Senshi_Kodo
05-11-2008, 13:22
(and anyone else they choose)

1- I'd say, Why? and probably, No.

The user can travel between the mirrors with greatly increased speed (+3 levels).

2- Isn't 3 too much? Also, it's not really that his speed increases. It's just that the jutsu allows him to travel through the mirrors with greater, undetectable speed.

Whilst inside of an ice mirror, the users sight becomes sharper and is sped up (+2 levels).

3- Is this benefit necessary?


This technique drains a moderate amount of chakra to maintain, therefore either the user (and any other occupants) must spend a C-rank worth of chakra every post after the first or their movement speed will be reduced by 1 level (eg. average becomes below average becomes bad, and etc.) (All levels of reduction are reset/removed if/when the user(s) renews the Jutsu)

4- With all those benefits, B-ranked drain should be more like it.

Evelis
05-11-2008, 13:33
How hard is it to break those mirrors, would a kunai be able to shatter one for instance, can you remake the broken mirrors, and how long would that take,

I assume this jutsu is stationairy, so people could run out if they wanted to right?

Azure
05-11-2008, 16:58
I've made some more major changes this time..

Senshi:
1) It sounded like an interesting idea; Okay
2) Edited to that
3) It's part of the original, but gone now
4) Changed back to B-Rank maintenance

Evelis:
1, 2, 3 & 4) Those first few things have been addressed now.
5) Yes, the dome is stationary, but the gaps between ice mirrors aren't much wider than someone could run through, making it harder for the target(s) to make it out before tey're attacked/cut off.
After performing the few required hand seals, the user begins to chill the air around them, and then form a dome of twenty-one ice mirrors in an approximate 10 meter radius around their opponent(s) trapping them inside.